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gshredder2112  
27 May 2011 00:05 | Quote
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Alright,so ive decided too stray from my stubborn ways and try to write something a bit more contemporary,not shreddy,not popish,just something the average music fan can listen too.I have some music and lyrics that fit it,but i need more lyrics to finish out the song.All responses are welcomed.
Heres what i have so far.

(INTRO)
(Shredding,tasteful,Piano-esque legato intro)
(verse,slap harmonic jazz ryhthm)
They say time,is a valuable thing.
but we watch it fly by.
and here them little birds sing.
(7 bar ryhthm break)
there watchin your tears.
they see you in pain.
but when you try to ask for help.
they just turn away,yeah.
(9bar rhythm)
verse 2)
But dont you cry.
cause its all in vain
The ones you loved the most.
Are gettin off on your pain.
(4bar break)
But thats ok.
because i got me.
cause the one who cares the most
is inside of me.
(Epic rush-ish prog riff starts 5reapeats)
(shawn lane,meets david gilmour solo 22 bars)
Intro reapeat)
verse rhythm reapeat).
Well im alright
its ok.
i didnt em anyway.
so dont you cry
dont regret
(this is the part i need help with,if you come up with a lyric that can end this song please help.

\M/(*-+)
gs2112
BodomBeachTerror  
27 May 2011 00:41 | Quote
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Well im alright
its ok.
i didnt em anyway.
so dont you cry
dont regret
but please won't you stay

?
Empirism  
27 May 2011 05:44 | Quote
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i didnt em anyway.
so dont you cry
dont regret
thats all I need to say.

btw, isnt the average music fans listen pop anyway? XD.. I lolled for your part descriptions hahhah "Epic rush-ish prog riff starts 5reapeats)"...:D

Phip  
27 May 2011 07:17 | Quote
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Well im alright
its ok.
i didnt em anyway.
so dont you cry
dont regret
The choices we made
DanielM  
27 May 2011 08:44 | Quote
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"I didn't em anyway"???

I'd end it with something like "cause it was worth it anyway" or a line with that idea
gshredder2112  
27 May 2011 11:30 | Quote
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@ DR Emp Thats a good point.What i kinda meant was sonething a liitle more musical than and a little less musical than shred if that makes sense.And haha! The "epic rush-ish prog riff is hilarious now that i look back on it.

And thanks you everyone for your input,I hope to get alot more ideas. Btw this is my first crack at songwriting,how is the song in general
quality wise? would you make any changes?

\M/(*-+)
gs2112
gshredder2112  
27 May 2011 15:03 | Quote
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the last part i failed on,it was supposed to be"i didnt need em anyway" good catch dm.
tinyskateboard  
27 May 2011 16:32 | Quote
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Sounds pretty good. Hope to hear it soon.
gshredder2112  
27 May 2011 17:26 | Quote
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Thnkx tsb,maybe a month or so,tryn to work on my singing chops.
romval1  
3 Jun 2011 04:57 | Quote
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Well did you think that you could inspire from other songs? Here is a link that maybe could help you. http://www.tabspedia.com/


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