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c20h25n3oisgood  
18 Sep 2008 20:18 | Quote
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Hi guys...this is my first post on these forums.

Uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh yeah,

been playing guitar for about 6.5 months (approx.)

www.myspace.com/halyonopus

I'd love to hear what you think. :)
BodomBeachTerror  
18 Sep 2008 20:23 | Quote
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no offense, but the timing is terrible
GRX40  
18 Sep 2008 20:29 | Quote
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I'm listening to "Purple" right now. Overall, I like the feel of the song, it seems happy, I like the lead part.

I think your rhythm part could use some work. It seems kind of choppy (which is probably intentional, at least at some parts), but when you're switching chords, it seems you have some trouble. I do not like the bass part, it seems too overpowering, but random, and it kind of takes away from the song.

I noticed around 1:25, you kind of break off and go into a different part that doesn't seem to fit in (the same thing in Guacamole Sand). Maybe try to write a fluid transition between parts?

I do think that you have a very good start, especially for only 6.5 months. I also think that some of your trouble could come from recording problems, since maybe you have latency that is throwing the recording off.


So overall, I would say just try to make the rhythm more fluid with the lead, since you seem sorta choppy now. Just keep practicing and it will come with time.
TheAmericanBrit  
18 Sep 2008 21:18 | Quote
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Ummm...

Sand was pretty cool, but the bad timing nearly killed it.

I like your pieces, but the timing is absolutely killing it.

Now, the timing might be the fault of whatever program you record with. I, myself, hate recording through my PC because of the latency that it causes.

Fix the timing, and add a drummer and bassist. Then, and only then, I will be interested.
Empirism  
20 Sep 2008 08:39 | Quote
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Yeah, get drum tracks to help you to stay on timing. Otherwise its kinda nice easy listening stuff.

Also Ive noticed that you dont bend strings much in your solos, that might be good thing to practise to get them more groovy.

Anyway nice start, keep on playing ^_^
Cheers!
foogered  
20 Sep 2008 10:44 | Quote
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You sound like you've got direction, and I can hear some improvement between tracks, but as the others have said, work on your timing and rhythm.

Also when improvising, try to play follow the rhythm of the song. It's kind of hard to describe, and I'm still working on it myself, but it's all about making the rhythm of your song and the rhythm of your solo line up.

Good luck, and don't be afraid to ask any questions!

EDIT:

I'd also recommend you practice following the chord changes when you improvise (this could be as simple starting each phrase on the root of the chord being played, or linking notes from the chord(s) together). It just seems like for the most part your improvisations are kind of random and box-pentatonic-y. Practicing this might make your solos groove with the song a little better.
JazzMaverick  
21 Sep 2008 08:30 | Quote
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Improve on your timing, and it'll be much better.

If you're not sure how to do that, just use a metronome, or when you're recording your songs, use the "click". This should help the timing and also give you a better sense of rhythm.
Heather  
21 Sep 2008 17:16 | Quote
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Sorry, my sounds gone funny, but for the recod I'm gonna return and edit this after I listen tomorrow.

(P.S don't worry about it! I'mnot so harsh on mistakes like some seem to have provoen!)
c20h25n3oisgood  
21 Sep 2008 20:16 | Quote
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Hey everybody thanks for all of your posts!!!

I know the timing is very crappy, and I didn't even really think about the songs before I began playing them. I'm sure if I put my mind to it I might be able to think some progressions through. I do need some work though. :)
I will definitely keep practicing and I plan to play guitar for the rest of my life.

I think there may also be a new song up. It's timing should be better.


Thanks everyone!
Heather  
22 Sep 2008 15:09 | Quote
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Great, never be put off by nasty attitudes that's what I like.

I quiet like your music honestly, Purple sounded a bit bad in what I suppose was sound quality, but I don't think that was actually your music going wrong there from what I could tell. Guamole sand, Sandwhich & Super Tunnel of death sounded great. Keep on practicing, I can tell you'll be a heck of a fine musician some day not far away...hey, that rymed...why do all my saying's rhyme today? Okay, now I've just gone off-subject!
JazzMaverick  
22 Sep 2008 16:23 | Quote
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It'll be nice to see your improvement, should you stay on this site.

Heather, criticism is necessary sometimes, it's all well and good being nice all the time, but if you don't tell a person where they need to improve on, they'll never get anywhere.
c20h25n3oisgood  
22 Sep 2008 21:16 | Quote
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Thanks folks.

"Heather, criticism is necessary sometimes, it's all well and good being nice all the time, but if you don't tell a person where they need to improve on, they'll never get anywhere."

I agree. I put up this thread in order to gain more perspective into my playing.
and that worked!
RelaxedDude  
22 Sep 2008 21:26 | Quote
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Haha the quote button is there for a reason bro

c20h25n3oisgood says:
Technology!!
Heather  
23 Sep 2008 14:40 | Quote
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True, I just find alot of the thing's can be just plain insults though. I won't mention who though, as it'll just argue and not go anywhere if I did.


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